David Jensen
English 101
November 15, 2015
Essay Outline
- Within the current century, technology has evolved and come a long way. Most teens, pre-teens, and mid age adults indulge in the technology in the form of video games. There has been a long term argument whether or not video games benefit or negatively effect us.
- Video games if handled with proper care can benefit us, the people
- Video games affect society
- Video Games effect eye sight
- Common saying heard "video games worsens eyesight"
- Lab experiment
- People who don't play action video games/spend time in front of screens generally had 'corrective-to-normal' eyesight
- Video game players are predicted to have worse eyesight
- Those who played video games for 5/10/15 hours a week had a sharper eye sight
- Vision was better in two different ways
- Video game players were able to resolve small detail in a context of clutter
- Reading fine print on a prescription rather then a magnifier glass
- Also, video game players are able to resolve different shades of grey better
- Imagine driving your car in the fog, this is the difference between hitting the car in front of you versus stopping in time because you were able to identify the car in front of you
- Clearly video games do not make eyesight worse.
- Video games effect multi-tasking/attention
- Everybody knows what multi-tasking is
- We all have done it ie: cellphone and driving
- Bad idea
- Attention shifts to phone and lose reaction to swiftly act to car accidents
- Lab experiment
- Tasks in the lab are created to capture millisecond accuracy of how well people are able to switch from one task to another
- The results are shocking, those who play video games have very very fast at multi-tasking
- Not necessarily all technology does this, the same experiment was ran with multi-media taskers (on Facebook, watching videos, while listening to music)
- The multi-media taskers were surprisingly achieving lower results then those who played video games
- these two things effect different pieces on the brain just as different video games will effect different pieces as well
- Action video games effect multi-tasking positively
- My video game experience
- Parents allow me to play video games
- Description on my video game experience
- Video games became something that stuck with me
- Parents then nag me about playing video games
- Video games changed me as a person
- How I've been effected
- Conclusion
- Hook to readers
- Refer back to body paragraphs
- Refer back to introduction
- Tell audience what is necessary
- Benefits of such
You have a lot of sub-topics under your main points. I am concerned that once you begin to flesh out these ideas into body paragraphs, the ideas will be a bit jumbled together.
ReplyDeleteYour thesis needs to be straight forward. You have two conflicting topics there. I would revise the thesis and be very clear with the direction you intend to guide the reader.
The paragraph about your personal experience needs to be omitted. This is not a personal research paper, so you're opinions and experience shouldn't be the basis of your argument. You need real research, evidence, and data to prove that there are significant reasons why video games are not as bad as people tend to think. Defintiely consider your organizational structure, your thesis, and your use of evidence throughout the course of the paper, here.